I liked in the story how the plot was about a little girl trying to buy a teddy.
Maybe you could used more descriptive words and you could have made the sentences a bit longer
it is a overall good story and it has its flaws but no story is perfect
Wheres the tittle?
Wheres your name?
You used punctuation properly that not a lot of people know how to use efficiently (Including me)
I liked in the story how the plot was about a little girl trying to buy a teddy.
Maybe you could used more descriptive words and you could have made the sentences a bit longer
it is a overall good story and it has its flaws but no story is perfect
Wheres the tittle?
Wheres your name?
You used punctuation properly that not a lot of people know how to use efficiently (Including me)