✨: I like how you said ‘But I still remember this day like it was yesterday. It shows the character’s emotions on how special the bear was to him.
✨: I like how you described how busy the streets were because it makes more sense to have a busy road so that the reader knows that he dropped it by accident because there were people everywhere (good job)
: I think that you c0uld use some short sentences at the end to show how sad he was.
✨: I like how you said ‘But I still remember this day like it was yesterday. It shows the character’s emotions on how special the bear was to him.
✨: I like how you described how busy the streets were because it makes more sense to have a busy road so that the reader knows that he dropped it by accident because there were people everywhere (good job)
: I think that you c0uld use some short sentences at the end to show how sad he was.
Good job