As always, your description is really good as it makes me ‘feel’ the writing’ and gets me immersed in it too. Although you don’t use many adjectives, your description is still good.
You made the writing a bit too complicated and I didn’t always understand what was going on. I got a bit confused; try not to use too many words in one sentence.
Your similes and metaphors are really good, although maybe you use them a bit too much.
The variation of your scenes, descriptive words and sentences are really good.
As always, your description is really good as it makes me ‘feel’ the writing’ and gets me immersed in it too. Although you don’t use many adjectives, your description is still good.
You made the writing a bit too complicated and I didn’t always understand what was going on. I got a bit confused; try not to use too many words in one sentence.
Your similes and metaphors are really good, although maybe you use them a bit too much.
The variation of your scenes, descriptive words and sentences are really good.