I like how you ended on a cliffhanger: “but really I could be dead,” because it made me want to find out what happens next and it’s very dramatic.
You need to remember not to miss out words because it makes me judge the story differently and kind of takes away the spooky effect.
I really like how you said “the Earth giving way for a cracked miss shaped museum,” because it is a great start to the story and creates a great effect. BY ALEX
I like how you ended on a cliffhanger: “but really I could be dead,” because it made me want to find out what happens next and it’s very dramatic.
You need to remember not to miss out words because it makes me judge the story differently and kind of takes away the spooky effect.
I really like how you said “the Earth giving way for a cracked miss shaped museum,” because it is a great start to the story and creates a great effect. BY ALEX