The Church Break-In by Fredrik

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  1. Anonymous says:

    Next step: Try to use more up leveled words in your writing.

    Positive: I like the sentence: ‘A blinding flash beamed at is green eyes’.

    Next step: Try in your next peice of writing, to not use a paragraph or at least only use 2 becaus you alway do.

    Positive: I like how you used short, snappy sentences to bring tenshen into your writing.

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