The Sleepover By Eloise

Posted on March 14, 2019 by Deleted User
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1 Response to The Sleepover By Eloise

  1. OMayo says:
    March 14, 2019 at 3:11 pm

    I like it that you use a friend as a character in the story.
    I think it would have been better if you said you heard a noise before you open the door.
    I found the description of your door knocking made a nice funny addition to the story.
    Olly M

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