Capree, that is brilliant, well done! I can only think of one problem, which is to no use ‘The bear’ so much, maybe instead you could use a metaphor? Apart from that there isn’t anything wrong with your story.
by Lois
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Capree, that is brilliant, well done!
I can only think of one problem, which is to no use ‘The bear’ so much, maybe instead you could use a metaphor? Apart from that there isn’t anything wrong with your story.
by Lois